oh AWESOME metaphor! So genius. And lighthearted. A combination you don't come by often. Seems profundity is inextricably linked to sadness, but this is smart and light.
Amber, You are too kind. Thanks again for your generous reading, and your encouraging comment. Took me awhile to realize I needed to break "they are" onto a line by itself, so that it (more obviously?) both completed line 2 (via meter) and is stolen away to start line 4. Small thing perhaps, but it is a gentle gesture for the reader to "start over" in the middle of the tiny poem - via their own fiddling. Peace, B.R.
oh AWESOME metaphor! So genius. And lighthearted. A combination you don't come by often. Seems profundity is inextricably linked to sadness, but this is smart and light.
ReplyDeleteAmber,
DeleteYou are too kind. Thanks again for your generous reading, and your encouraging comment. Took me awhile to realize I needed to break "they are" onto a line by itself, so that it (more obviously?) both completed line 2 (via meter) and is stolen away to start line 4. Small thing perhaps, but it is a gentle gesture for the reader to "start over" in the middle of the tiny poem - via their own fiddling.
Peace,
B.R.