this is where
the bird flew
through the glass
this is where
the bomb-shaped
blue jay passed
this is where
the shattered
are scattered
inside the dead
shed? or out toward
the buttery grass?
Hey Molly Jo, Thanks for your kind comment. Didn't really intend to conclusively state that the bird had died (in this incident). The questions at the end were intended to suggest, based on where the shattered glass was gathered, that we might be able to deduce the direction of the bird's flight. The title, though, may be too weighted - and I failed to strike the balance between the possibilities of destruction and escape. Rewrite! Peace, B.R.
Beautiful picture/words. Not sure how I feel about the thought of a dead bird...
ReplyDeleteHey Molly Jo,
DeleteThanks for your kind comment. Didn't really intend to conclusively state that the bird had died (in this incident). The questions at the end were intended to suggest, based on where the shattered glass was gathered, that we might be able to deduce the direction of the bird's flight. The title, though, may be too weighted - and I failed to strike the balance between the possibilities of destruction and escape. Rewrite!
Peace,
B.R.